Five word story in paragraph form.

[Qdeathstar 1763]

I shall endevour to update this once a page..

the sun rises over a ruined city. A lone man in a world of zombies, falls to his knees, exhausted. He sighs, hearing shuffling behind him, and reloads his worn, yet trusty shotgun. He turns around quickly, with poise and quickly scans the area. Seeing movement behind a nearby garden fence he backs away, when suddenly an armed crazy survivor knocks him down, and then demands he turn over all his food and ammunition. In a daze, he replied "fuck you", and grabbed the shotgun, slowly pulling himself upright. Taking careful aim, he raises his shotgun, writhing in pain. He takes a deep troubled breath. the crazed survivor begins to draw his weapon

[gtagrl 4317]

You missed "resolutely" reloads his shotgun. If you're going to transcribe the story in one topic, which is a great idea, at least copy and paste what's there.

We should pick one tense to be consistent, either present tense like we started with, or past tense which will inevitably pop up.

he falls to his knees; he replies "Fuck you"

or

he fell to his knees; he replied "Fuck you"

If that doesn't happen in the story topic, it could be cleaned up in this merged version.

[Qdeathstar 1763]

I tried, was doing on my iPad, but I agree with everything you said